B7 Perceptions: A Difference of Visions - Chapter 14 Revision

Random Musings

28th-Apr-2009 11:46 am

Apologies to those who have already read Chapter 14 of A Difference of Visions. After discussions and some valuable input by

jaxomsride, I have made some major changes to the middle scene where Reya is interacting with the Kirsten character. As always, new changes marked in blue.

A Difference of Visions, Revised Chapter 14

Comments

28th-Apr-2009 11:53 pm (UTC)

Interesting changes.
Though showing how she nearly died may put some of them off the whole idea of Challenges.

28th-Apr-2009 11:56 pm (UTC)

The dying part wasn't part of the Challenges though. That happened after. Perhaps I could have her stress that the Challenges will be safe.

29th-Apr-2009 12:04 am (UTC)